Archive for February 2018
segue
segue
(verb) move without interruption from one song, melody or scene to another.
(noun) an uninterrupted transition from one piece of music or film scene to another.

Ways of creating smooth transitions, from chapter to chapter, action to action, or scene to scene:
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- make sure the tone and rhythm of the writing are similar or appropriate in the transition. This may be particularly important since I am writing poetry. Sometimes, a smooth transition will occur because lines are of a similar length or number of beats, or because the tonal qualities of the poetry are similar. On the other hand, there may be places where an abrupt change is necessary to introduce an element of anxiety or surprize. I compare this to the background music in a movie, carrying the watcher from scene to scene, or changing abruptly to signal a crisis. In the following passage, the terse, rather short lines of Chapter 13 are focused on action verbs and are picked up by terse statements in Chapter 14:
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Madoline locks the door as she leaves.
Ignores the way to her cell
in the honeycomb.
Turns
towards the centre
of the city.
14.
Belnar throws down his pack.
“Not there,” he says.
“Big scandal afoot.
The cook gone.
Eighteen
unconscious
Gel-heads.
Nine dead
Dock-winders.”
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- use a repeated idea or word to help transition the reader. An example might be the use of colour. Sometimes in movies characters are shown walking down a hallway, for example, and characters in the next scene are also walking down a hallway. In the following passage, the idea of swirling at the end of Chapter 1 is picked up by the word ‘confusion’ at the beginning of Chapter 2:
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Chill wind kisses cold rock.
Sweeps out, across the Darn’el.
Stirs desert and dust.
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Confusion in the village.
The women gone.
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- have a character in the first scene think about a character in the second. In Chapter 9, the Dock-winder child Don’est remembers Kathryn and Chapter 10 takes us immediately to Kathryn in the Gel-head’s clutches:
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“And Kathryn
was a bedwarmer,”
says the Dock-winder child,
nodding, the wisp of a smile
on her thin lips.
Her knowledge
not appropriate
for her years.
12.
Kathryn waits in the cell
of the honeycomb.
Fiddles with a ring above her eye.
Tries to ignore confining walls,
paltry inflow of air.
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- signal to the reader that something new is coming. If the location changes, name the new location to make sure the reader knows where the action is situated. In Chapter 7, Don’est, the Dock-winder child, reminds the others that she and the wolf-like Kotildi are also part of the community of Themble Hill. In Chapter 8, the action is taken far from the Themble Wood, in the city of Prell:
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“Len, len.
And me,”
says Don’est.
“And tame Kotildi.
“Elan’drath
in the Themble Wood.”
8.
Tal and Daniel in a room
as unlike the Themble Wood
as it is possible to be.
Del-sang ma’hath,
Acquisitions Tracking,
Prell.
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- report on an event happening in the previous chapter. In the following passage, Odymn rocks the new baby in Chapter 22 and Vicki refers to the birth of the baby in Chapter 23:
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Odymn weeps when she sits with Malele
and rocks the tiny baby.
23.
“Fourteen days,”
says Vicki.
“Fourteen days
and we’ve made
no progress at all.
“Back in the Themble
Malele’s baby will have been born.
They will be wondering
if we will ever return.”
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So my first task in creativity is to look at each shift from one chapter to another and write in some segues. Sounds a little like editing to me!
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What do you think of the transitions I have written above? What devices do you use to make certain there is a smooth transition from one chapter to the next?
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Copyright 2018 Jane Tims
Meniscus: One Point Five – Forty Missing Days
Know first, then judge … understanding one another may be the most dangerous part of any shared journey …
My new book in the Meniscus Series is available!!!!
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To get a paperback copy, visit https://www.amazon.com/dp/1978407564
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As I write my science fiction Meniscus Series, I realize there are questions my readers may have about circumstances in the books. In fact, I have a few questions. Why are there no knives on the planet Meniscus? What is beelwort (revealed in Meniscus Five)? Why do people on a planet with interstellar travel walk wherever they go?
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The biggest question in my own mind — what happens during the forty missing days in Meniscus: Crossing The Churn (between the time when the Slain is shot and the time when he and Odymn release her lock of hair to the wind)? As I thought about this, I began to write Meniscus: One Point Five.
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Meniscus: One Point Five
Forty Missing Days
by Alexandra (a.k.a. Jane) Tims
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When the Slain bails on his contract to sell Odymn to the Dock-winders, he is shot trying to escape. Odymn, who loves the Slain, cannot abandon him. She recruits Wen-le-gone, an Argenop elder and healer, to help her nurse the Slain back to good health. As they make their way toward the relative safety of the Themble, the trio must forage for food, save Odymn when she encounters a poisonous foe, and get to know and trust one-another. When Wen-le-gone leaves for his home, Odymn decides to stay with the Slain. As they continue on their journey, they work together to survive the dangers of the Themble Wood but in the end, memories of the past may be their biggest obstacle to building a life together.
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Meniscus: One Point Five takes place near the end of the first book in the Meniscus Series, and tells the story of the forty missing days after the shooting of the Slain. Helping the Slain heal from his wounds and protecting him from the dangers of Meniscus may be the least of Odymn’s problems.
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Copyright Jane Tims 2018
feeding the birds
I am late this year with putting out bird feeders. Two reasons: the reported difficulty with disease in bird feeders last year and my general lack of time.
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This morning I made a bird feeder from a coke bottle (my son and I used to do this when he was little) and filled three of our feeders. The old sunflower seed feeders, difficult to clean and too expensive to toss out every few days, are in the trash.
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Presenting my new home-made feeder for sunflower seeds! I may add a simple roof to keep the snow out. I can replace it at intervals to keep it clean.
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The finch-feeder with nyjer (thistle) seed:
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A pile of seeds in our frozen bird-bath, for the squirrels and deer:
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As I came in from outside, I heard a chickadee in the larch tree, so I am hoping they will find the feeders soon.
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one of the illustrations in my book ‘in the shelter of the covered bridge’ (Chapel Street Editions 2017)
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