nichepoetryandprose

poetry and prose about place

in the shelter of the covered bridge – a villanelle

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I have been working at my series of poems on the plants and animals living around covered bridges in New Brunswick. I decided to try a new form (for me) – the villanelle.

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The villanelle is a structured poem with 19 lines and a prescribed rhyming scheme – A1 b A2 / a b A1 / a b A2/ a b A1/ a b A2 / a b A1 A2 . A famous villanelle is by Dylan Thomas – ‘Do not go gentle into that good night’.

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The poem below is based on my observations at the Marven Bridge (Belleisle Creek #2) in Kings County, New Brunswick. I have taken liberties with the form, most obviously in using words beginning with the same letter in place of rhyming. I would appreciate any comments, including for improvement of the poem.

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Marven Bridge, Belleisle Creek #2, in New Brunswick

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wobble

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Belleisle Creek #2 (Marven Covered Bridge)

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bridge shudders as we walk

spaces between boards cast light on the floor

photos out of focus, faint tremble

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cribwork and rafters, new wood

old nails work loose, grey walls frail

bridge shakes as we walk

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in the rafters, the paper nest of a wasp

in the mud, ephemeral, the tracks of a fox

photos out of focus, faint tremble

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a blue jay calls thief across brown water

at the shoreline, sensitive fern

bridge shivers as we walk

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on the ledge, bones, bleached white

skeleton of a bear, backbone and fingers

photos out of focus, faint tremble

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orange graffiti, letters round and wide

initials carved on the beams are faded

bridge quivers as we walk

photos out of focus, faint tremble

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Copyright Jane Tims 2015

Written by jane tims

August 5, 2015 at 2:13 pm

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  1. I like how you describe the bridge as it shudders, shakes, shivers, and quivers.

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    Robin

    August 7, 2015 at 8:52 am

    • Hi Robin. Thanks. Do you have any covered bridges in your area? Jane

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      jane tims

      August 7, 2015 at 10:53 am

      • Good question, Jane. I’m not sure. A quick search turned up one that might be here on the Eastern Shore, but it’s quite a distance from us. I’ll have to look into it. Ohio, where I used to live, has a lot of covered bridges to explore.

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        Robin

        August 7, 2015 at 11:11 am


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